The diagrams below show the present building of a college and the plan for changes to the college site in the future

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The given maps display the current and future situation in 2020 in the colleges’ area. There will be several improvements in the inner and outer environment. By and large, the car park is planned to enlarge in the future

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the footpath and back garden will be renovated in 2020.

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, there will be a new room for the classroom and the shop. Turning into detail, it is apparent that the old entrance gate which is at the north and the old reception on the west side will be moving into the south nearby the Bus stop feeder, so the students and guests do not need to walk before entering the building hall.

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, the library will be moving to the left corner of the building

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the right corner will be the classroom, so that four classrooms on the west of the colleges and left just one classroom on the eastern.

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, the lunch area will be in the same position.

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, the north-left side will be occupied by a shop next to the restrooms.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

177 words

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The diagrams below show the present building of a college and the plan for changes to the college site in the future

Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

In the future it may be necessary for us to live on other planets. For this reason, some people believe that we should spend money now researching planets that could be a possible home, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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