The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010
The bar graph gives information on
comparison
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a comparison
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of
Australian's
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Australian
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residences between 1995 and 2010 based on their
birth place
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birthplace
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(in and outside
Australia
). In 1995,
people
who were born in
australia
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and outside
australia
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Australia
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were live in
cities
with
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a percentage
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percentage
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percentages
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above 50%.
Beside of
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that,
Percentage
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the Percentage
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of
people
who lived in town is 20 % below and 40 % below for
people
who lived in rural areas. For
an
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the
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entire year of 2010, most of
people
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the people
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in
australia
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Australia
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lived in
cities
with
percentage
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a percentage
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above 60%.
However
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,However
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in
this
year the number of
people
who decided to
lived
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live
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in
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the rurals
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rurals
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rural
area
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areas
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suprisingly
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surprisingly
decrease
until
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to
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10% below and the
percentage
of
people
who lived in town
also
decrease above 10 % per
categories
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category
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. In summary, the
percentage
of
people
who lived in
cities
keep going up over
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the year
a year
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year
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years
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.
Mostly
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Most
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Australian's
people
decided to
lived
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live
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in
cities
even though they were born in different countries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, people, cities, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • urbanization
  • migration patterns
  • population distribution
  • percentage points
  • growth rate
  • decline
  • trend analysis
  • socioeconomic factors
  • infrastructure development
  • rural exodus
  • census data
  • lifestyle changes
  • residential patterns
  • immigration policies
  • emigration
  • natural increase
  • birth rate
  • settlement patterns
  • push and pull factors
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