Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
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health
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with a
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on
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that infect
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taking
medicines
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apply
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medicines
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faster
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the faster
a faster
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results
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eating
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eat
any thing
,Correct your spelling
anything
also
without asking a doctor
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of having
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a person
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medicines
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up become shocked and Correct your spelling
woke
he
did not believe.
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apply
medicines
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doctor
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but hurt people of families, Correct word choice
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