Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology.
In what ways has technology affected the types of relation people make?
Has that become a positive or negative development?

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These days, we can see significant changes in society more than before. The changes were caused by the high importance of technology in our lives. In
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with, ease that technology gave us,
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can communicate with each other far away. In the modern world, we have smartphones which we can take everywhere. They have an of
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functions that make our life comfortable,
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internet connection and phone calls. That made relationships between
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turn virtual. It has its advantages,
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,
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are aware of different cultures and points of view. It affected society a
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by making them open-minded.
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, virtual interaction makes
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addicted to itself, of its easy accessibility and safety.
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everyone can pretend to be another person and hide their real personality without any problem. After those long interactions,
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forget how to communicate in real life.
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, we can see that rate of lonely
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has raised a
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and the reason is the inability to interact in real life
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, I think that every improvement has its negative and positive sides.
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technology development influenced society a
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whether it's good or not
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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