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The chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.
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The bar chart shows the comparison between two years
that is
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 1990 and 2010 when different
age
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groups
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 living in Britain donated
money
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 to
charity
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.
Overall
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, in 1990 over 40% of
people
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 between the
age
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 range 36 and 50 donated to
charity
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 which is the highest record of all time.
Whereas
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, the percentage of
people
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 donating in their early 20s in the year 2010 is significantly less as compared to other
age
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groups
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. In 1990, approximately 42% of the public in their late 40s are spending
money
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 on
charity
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 which is the highest among all other
age
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groups
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.
Whereas
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, over 15% of
people
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 in their early 20s are seen to be donating. Over 30% of British
people
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 between the
age
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 range 26-35 and less than
age
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 65 are seen to donating
charity
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.
However
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, 35% of citizens between the ages of 51-65 donated
money
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 in 1990 which makes them secure 2nd position.
Moreover
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, in 2010 nearly 40% of
people
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 highest among all
age
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groups
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 are seen spending
money
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 on
charity
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 purposes. It is seen that the same percentage of
people
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that is
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 35% between their late 30s and 40s have raised funds. Nearly 7% of the public between the ages of 18-25 have donated
money
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 which makes them come
last
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 on the charts. In conclusion,
people
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 in 1990 from all
age
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groups
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 are seen to donate more to
charity
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 as compared to
people
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 in 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups, money, charity, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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