The charts below show changes in the proportion of the energy produces from different resoruces in a country in 1985 and 2003.

The charts below show changes in the proportion of the energy produces from different resoruces in a country in 1985 and 2003.
The below-given pie charts show the percentage changes
of
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the
energy
that was produced from six different resources in the span of 18 years within a particular country.
While
glancing at the graphs, it is evident that the majority of the power was produced from oil, in both
the
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years. As we look at the chart of the year 1985, it is noticeable that the resources that made most of the power were oil and nuclear
powers
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power
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.
Along with
these, natural gas produced about 13% of
energy
and was followed by coal and hydro which formed 8% and 4% of
energy
, respectively. Other renewable sources formed only 1% of
energy
. The graph of 2003 included high
energy
production from resources like oil (39%), natural gas (23%) and coal (22%). Following these sources of
energy
were nuclear powers, hydro and other renewable sources,
that
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produced 8%, 4% and 4% of power, respectively.
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