IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

Many parents today organise extra classes for their children after school and at the weekends. Do you feel that this is a worthwhile thing to do or do you feel children have enough education at school? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#parents #organise #classes #children #school #weekends #education
In
this
 contemporary era world has been changing by leaps and bounds. Nowadays
children
 face many academic challenges. So, some people consider that organizing extra classes after school is better for their studies.
Whereas
 others believe that school gives enough education to pupils. I totally agree with you later. It has more pros and cons. First and foremost, the schools have been providing sufficient education to their students.
Children
 spend more time in schools rather than private tuition. so, tutors can spend more time with students because they know about
children
’s strengths and weaknesses they teach
accordingly
.
Moreover
, educators teach only which is carry more marks
instead
 of skill-based.
In addition
, after 8 hours of ,schooling all kids must have been tired and need to relax, but parents send their
children
 to private tuitions but the Teutons teach only competitive skills. Some parents waste a lot of money and spoiled their
children
's health and time.
According to
 some researchers over-studying doesn’t make kids become more intelligent or smarter. In ,conclusion Governments and parents should join in some creative education institutions which are the more practical and creative and stress-free environment for their
children
 and extra classes should be banned and substituted by soft skills classes
Submitted by ksr.sandya on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: