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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and Projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and Projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the population of two countries which are Yemen and Italy in three different categories: the first
category
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 is 0-14
years
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 old, the
second
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category
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 is 15-69
years
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 old, the third
category
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 is +60
years
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 old at two different times past and future,
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 2000 and 2050.
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, the majority of the population of the two countries are included in the
second
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category
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 whose ages are between 15 to 59
years
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 old.
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, the first
category
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 has the least ratio. In 2000, in Yemen, half of the population were the oldest
people
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, and the
second
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group
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 had about 46%. After 50
years
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, in 2050, the proportion of oldest
people
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 will decrease by more than 10%.
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, the number of
people
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 in the
second
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category
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 will increase and will reach more than 50%. From 2000 to 2050 the number of the youngest
group
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 will rise slightly about 2% and will reach 5.7%. In Italy, the proportion of the
second
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group
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 will fall sharply from 61% to 46%. But, the percentage of oldest
people
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 will almost double from 2000 to 2050, 24%
to42
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to 42
%. The percentage of the first
group
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 which
are
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 the youngest will fall
about
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by about
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 3% from 14% to 11%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words category, years, second, people, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • population pyramid
  • projections
  • young population
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
  • increase in elderly population
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • population dynamics
  • top-heavy
  • balanced age distribution
  • healthcare needs
  • pension provision
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