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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Nowadays, growing of
human
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 population has significantly increased . In some nations , some people
agrue
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argue
agree
 that possessing a house is more crucial rather than leasing one .
This
 is
due to
 the fact that the cost of rent has doubled compared to before .
In
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 my perspective,
i
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 think the issues may
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its
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 merits. There are many advantages for owners over possessing a home.
Firstly
,homeownership provides stability and security to an individual ,
in contrast
 to renting , as it enhances the sense of permanent living arrangement,eradicating the uncertainty associated with frequent relocations.
Secondly
, residents who own their property have more control
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 their living environment and greater freedom ,
consequently
, they have the option to customise and
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 their living space as they like as they can
decorating
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such
 a way that
reflect
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 their lifestyle and taste.
For example
,
study
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 has been made on the
sychological
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psychological
 well-being of human between renter and homeowner show that the
last
 experience
more
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a more
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 comfortable
life
 and
they
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apply
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pay attention
for
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 chosen career to settle down their
life
.
While
 having a considerable mortgage with
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 additional interest can put some strain on their financial
statuts
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status
,
but
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the payment will return to the homeowner
not
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 the landlord.
Moreover
 , as home prices have progressively increased worldwide ,
this
 will benefit from the appreciation of the property's value and enhancing the financial position.
Furthermore
, homeownership can make some investment by renting out the department and return back with a steady monthly salary .
As a result
, these implements can reduce the need for
addtional
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additional
 work and develop the quality of
life
 in the future . In conclusion , its undoubtedly that investing Can be the optimal choice
due to
 the
feel
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 of financial stability, boosting their
life
 esteem and
overall
 satisfaction . I
strongely
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strongly
 believe that
this
 positive trend
outweigh
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 the negative ones as it
acheive
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achieves
 people's goal and
prosper
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prospers
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 the
soceity
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society
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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