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Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. In order to get ideas from the pubic, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. Write a letter to the librarian. In your letter *describe what you like about the library *say what you dont like *make suggestions for improvements.

#library #improvements #services #facilities #pubic #users #suggestions #librarian #*describe #*say #dont #*make
Dear Sir or Madam I am Hong Le and I am a student at Richar University. I often go to Melbourne public
library
 to read or research to help my studying.
This
 is a good public
library
, thank you for your
set-up
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. There are many kinds of books to read and the way to set up is easy to find the
book
 that I need. The only problem is right now your policy just allows you to borrow the
book
 maximum for one week. I think
this
 is too short a time, and some students do not have enough time to read and finish the
book
.
For example
, I had
borrow
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 the
book
: A man is searching for the
meaning
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 of
life
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 from the
library
 for one week but I could not finish it.
That is
 why I have to give back and register to borrow again. In order to improve the quality of
the
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public libraries, I think we have to change it. I hope the
library
 can change the system and help other people have more time to read and enjoy the
book
. Best regard Hong Le
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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