Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. In order to get ideas from the pubic, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. Write a letter to the librarian. In your letter describe what you like about the library say what you dont like *make suggestions for improvements.

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Dear Sir or Madam I am Hong Le and I am a student at Richar University. I often go to Melbourne public

library

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to read or research to help my studying.

This

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is a good public

library

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, thank you for your

set-up

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setup

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. There are many kinds of books to read and the way to set up is easy to find the

book

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that I need. The only problem is right now your policy just allows you to borrow the

book

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maximum for one week. I think

this

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is too short a time, and some students do not have enough time to read and finish the

book

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, I had

borrow

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the

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: A man is searching for the

meaning

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life

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from the

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for one week but I could not finish it.

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why I have to give back and register to borrow again. In order to improve the quality of

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public libraries, I think we have to change it. I hope the

library

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can change the system and help other people have more time to read and enjoy the

book

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. Best regard Hong Le

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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189 words

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The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

Is it better to live in a small or a big city? Give reasons and examples to support you answer.

Some people think that the government should fund creative people such as artists and musicians due to the benefits they provide to society, other people believe that as they enjoy their work they should have received no government funding. Discuss both sides.

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