The plans below show a student room for two people and a student room for one person at an Australian university

The plans above illustrate the
architecture
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layouts inside a
one person
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dormitory
room
and accommodation for 2 individuals.
Overall
,
while
the student
room
for 2 persons has more
spaces
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, the opposite was seen in the
dormitory
room
for 1 individual. The
room
for 1 person to stay is 6 meters long and 2.5 meters wide, and the price is 200$ per week. The facilities are simple, with the kitchen opposite the bathroom and a bed next to the window.
Moreover
, there is a
study
desk
next to the bed
for
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the
student
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to
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have a place
for studying
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.
Additionally
, there is a TV opposite the
desk
to entertain after a long stressful day.
In the
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second plan, which is the structure of a 2 people
dormitory
, has the same length and
1.5
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meters wider compared to the
room
for 1 individual. The kitchen is turned around perpendicularly, making space to put a table and 2 chairs where students can socialize and watch TV. There are 2 beds in the
room
, one remains the same compared to a single
dormitory
and the other bed is perpendicular
with
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the first one and
are
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separated by 2 cupboards to make private spaces.
The
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study
desk
1 remains unchanged
while
the
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study
desk
2 is at the edge of
bed
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2.
Additionally
, the
study
desks are arranged opposite each other along both sides of the wall.
Moreover
, there is a TV opposite the chairs and table and next to the
study
desk
2.
Last
but not least, there is a bookshelf against the bathroom.
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