The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture below illustrates the production of soft
cheese
.
Overall
, there are five stages in the whole process of making
cheese
, which
are
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mixing, cooling, fermentation, evaporation, and cooling before getting ready to be used. Each step demands
different
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a different
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time and temperature so as to create the best results of
cheese
.
At
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the beginning, two original materials namely water and milk are mixed together and
then
moved to the second step which is cooling. At
this
stage
, the mixture is refrigerated for 2
hours
at 5 Celsius degrees.
While
being cooled, salt is added
into
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this
kind of liquid. After that, the mixture goes to the third
stage
called “fermentation”, where it is heated up to 35°C
in
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6
hours
. The next
stage
after the fermentation process is evaporating. At
this
stage
, the mixture is mainly steamed for 8
hours
at 100°C,
this
process takes the longest time among 5 steps.
Next,
the result will be cooled again to 5 Celsius degrees
in
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6
hours
while
wastewater is removed and soft
cheese
is collected by a filter
at the end
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