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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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.Nowadays, because of
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’s ability to buy some products all around the world, so many
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 are becoming more similar. I strongly believe that there is no deal with
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 fact that
people
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 are able to buy
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 from
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another country
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countries
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. In case that
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. In case
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countries
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 are not going to look or contribute similar insight
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 cultural and natural differences in each country. The second point is that access to
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goods from all over the world even can have more opportunities for
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someone in
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. .In terms of each
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 uniqueness in cultural aspects or natural
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wouldn’t
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be really similar. It goes without saying that
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some moment
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 have similarities in products, but It is known that there are certain types of
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 that are essential needs for
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 and
these
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 are a lot of companies that distribute their product in different places.
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, today in Kazakhstan
people
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 influence
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 Russian market goods and some
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 buy through
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the internet
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things
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 from Russia,
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however
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 It
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does not
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 these two
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 absolutely similar. .
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,
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the ability
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 products of any kind is helpful for those who may need some special treatment. A lot of
people
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 who suffer from
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diseases
dresses
 often
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may need
 equipment
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to order
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 medication that might
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be rare
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 in their country.
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and
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web-site
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website
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 iherb provides
opportunity
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opportunities
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 for
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 in different
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 to get some treatment.
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, It does not make any problem. .In conclusion, there is no doubt that because of the process of globalization in some
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moments
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 will have similarities .
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 , there are more positive conditions
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such
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 development rather than negative ones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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