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It is important for children to learn the difference between right nad wrong at n early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should be parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from you own knowledge or experience.

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Since time immemorial, parents and teachers have been employing different modes of punishment for young children to make sure that they differentiate right from wrong. I partially agree with
this
 and given below are the reasons to support my claim. On one hand, it is of
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 importance that young individuals are taught that all actions have consequences as they are not born with
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 understanding themselves.
For example
, in response to a wrong
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 parents can decline their daily TV time or their outdoor sports time. Teachers can give extra homework or assignments.
This
 way the child will think before repeating the same mistake in the future.
On the other hand
, one must make sure that the punishment isn't too rigorous as
this
 will instill a sense of fear in the child which may be more
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 what is required. It will not allow them to express their emotions openly as they will be scared as to what may come next. Every action should have an adequate response and one
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 go overboard with rectifying. In my opinion,
firstly
 it should be explained with mere words as to why an act is improper and a warning can be given. In spite of
this
, if the child continues to behave the same
then
 a different mode of punishment can be employed.
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