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Today much of the food people eat gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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 and environment the question is, what the people think about
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 with gets local
food
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palnts
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plants
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farms
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 nation have abilities to grow
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 of vegetables we couldn’t grow in
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miles it is best for some countries we can decrease the
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