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Today much of the food people eat gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#food #people #farms #thousands #miles #environment #economy #farmers #outweigh
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 and environment the question is, what the people think about
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parts advantages and disadvantages
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 with gets local
food
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such
 as Saudi Arabia It is desert
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therfore
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, it is a little
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palnts
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plants
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frams
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farms
 the main reason given to support
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 nation have abilities to grow
tyeps
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types
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potato
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all
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kind
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 of vegetables we couldn’t grow in
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because
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nevertheless
,
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 it would be more harmful for enviornment . In conclusion ,
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miles it is best for some countries we can decrease the
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