The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.

A trend has been observed that in a number of
western
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nations,
number
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the number
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of overweight kids rose
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20%, over the
last
decade. Most of them have unhealthy eating habits and are
massive
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influenced by aggressive advertising.
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essay will delineate some solutions related to prevention programs which follow to limit
this
trend. The foremost reason for
this
trend, as previously mentioned is associated with
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of
food
from markets. Nowadays, people choose
food
by its aspect and
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habit
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great providers to use artificial substances, or to grow plants and animals in artificial ways.
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entire process,
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to raise the profit margins, but at the same time, affects general health
especial
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for
children
, because they are in
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process.
In addition
, fast
food
companies invest every year, millions of dollars in advertising, to promote their products. Processed products have dangerous amounts of fats, sugar or salt, which
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regulary
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regularly
consumed,
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the rate of obesity and other chronic diseases. As a solution, governmental institutions should invest additional
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to introduce prevention programs in schools. During classes,
children
should learn about the importance of eating organic
food
, or which categories of aliments can not be mixed,
for
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bread with chips must
to
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be avoided because those two have similar kinds of carbs.
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, national programmes should offer free training sessions for overweight kids. Finding
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to practice daily activities, most of the kids avoid
to do
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it
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. Special programs with low rate intensity adapted for certain persons can cogent more people to join in and to improve their quality of life. In conclusion,
overweight
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amongst
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children
is a real problem underpinned by the poor quality of
food
and the lack of movement. National institutions should raise
the
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public awareness about
this problems
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this problem
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and
inverst
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invest
inverse
funds in
children
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education.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overweight
  • obesity
  • caloric intake
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • screen time
  • physical education
  • nutritious
  • psychological well-being
  • self-esteem
  • socioeconomic
  • healthcare system
  • life expectancy
  • obesity-related complications
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