The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The pie chart and the table are about the preferences and choices of
visitors
from various parts of the world
such
as Asia, Europe, the USA and so on , at a particular Australian resort.
Overall
, the chart illustrates that most of the
visitors
are from Asia
as well as
Europe
whereas
, the percentage of tourists from America and other nations is less. 37% of Asian
visitors
have visited
this
resort which is in fact the highest percentage among other travelers but their average stay is only one week.
Whereas
, 35% of European foreigners visit
this
resort and their average stay is of 16 days.
Furthermore
, European and travellers from other countries prefer Camping or caravans
whereas
Asian and American sightseers prefer 5-star and 4-star hotels. Asian and American people do sightseeing as their main activity. As per the survey, swimming or surfing is the main activity of European sightseers.
However
,
visitors
from other regions like to do surfing as their main activity.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • comparison
  • spike
  • drop
  • correlation
  • seasonal variation
  • demographics
  • tourist influx
  • resort
  • holidaymakers
  • visitor statistics
  • notable changes
  • fluctuation
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • international tourists
  • domestic tourists
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • political climate
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