Whether or not a person achieves their aims in life is mostly related to luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Achieving
goals
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of humans depends on
luck
mostly. In some situations I agree with
this
view,
on the other
hand
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that achieving aims requires some
skills
and
education
.
Therefore
people
have to improve their
skills
during
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in
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life,
moreover
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,moreover
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they have to always try to be successful. Sometimes the success of
person
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a person
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depends on their
luck
.
People
should not make
effort
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an effort
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for achieving something.
Universe
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The universe
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just gives them what they want.
Although
it is like
lottery
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the lottery
a lottery
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, today they can be lucky,
however
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,however
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tomorrow they can not be. One of my
friend
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friends
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very lucky person. Because he always wins some gifts on
instagram
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Instagram
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. He just shares with posts in his stories and
at the end
he wins some perks like gadgets. Despite winning he could not control
this
lottery and sometimes he can just take part in lotteries from sponsors.
For instance
, nobody can
not
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apply
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control their
luck
, but some
people
can be lucky more than others. Mainly
the
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apply
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achieving
goals
links
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with
education
and some
skills
.
Therefore
everyone has to improve their soft and hard
skills
also
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and also
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try to take quality
education
in the best universities of over the world. It will certainly lead to aims. Some
people
should take courses to take new knowledge to be more successful in life. In every area
goals
require improving
skills
, good health,
time
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and time
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management. Some
people
can achieve their
goals
,
however
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but
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can sacrifice health.
In
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this
occasion
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everyone has to control their ways and keep balance. In conclusion, achieving
goals
in life
related
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is related
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to
luck
. In some
cases
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I agree with
this
position,
although
aims require some
skills
and
education
from
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • luck
  • determination
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • skills
  • continuous learning
  • achievements
  • opportunities
  • networking
  • personal accountability
  • diverse backgrounds
  • access to resources
  • causality
  • creative industries
  • structured fields
  • linear
  • predicated on merit
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