The charts below give information on the consumption of water by agricultural products in Australia in 2014, and the share of income they produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given two pie charts illustrate
water
usage and earnings proportions in different agricultural sectors in Australia in the year 2014.
Overall
, the livestock
and rice
sectors became the largest and the smallest consumers of water
respectively. On the other hand
, the fruit and livestock
ones did the same in the income
. It's noticeable that despite using the most amount of water
, the livestock
sector's share was the smallest one
when it comes to income
generation.
In water
usage, the livestock
, fruit and dairy products' percentages were the highest competitors with 36%, 21% and 19% respectively. However
, when it comes to making income
, the fruits had a proportion of 36% being the top contributor. The dairy one
made 21% while
the oxen one
made 5% being the smallest competitor.
On the other hand
, the sugar, the other and the rice
products had percentages of 10, 9 and 5 in water
usage respectively. In the matter of income
generation, they kept the same percentages excluding the rice
one
. The Correct pronoun usage
ones
rice
one
's rate became the third-best with 19%.Submitted by firsturdiev on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, livestock, rice, income, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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