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the given picture illustrates the steps in the production of soft cheese. It can be clearly seen that five main steps are there in the making of soft cheese.

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the given picture illustrates the steps in the production of soft
cheese
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. It can be clearly seen that five main steps are there in the making of soft
cheese
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.
Initially
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, water and milk are mixed in a mixer.
After
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this
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step
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 the
mixture
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 is cooled at 5
°C
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 for 2
hours
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. In the following step, the cooled
mixture
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 is sent for fermentation at 35
°C
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 for 2
hours
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. But, before fermentation, salt is added to the cooled
mixture
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.
Then
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, the fermented
mixture
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 is evaporated at 100
°C
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 for eight
hours
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. Steam is allowed to escape through an outlet.
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Finally
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 the
mixture
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 is sent for cooling.
This
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 is done at 5
°C
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 for eight
hours
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. The
mixture
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 becomes very thick on cooling. At the bottom is a filter through which the water is filtered out and on the top is an outlet through which the
cheese
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 is filtered out.
This
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 is very soft in consistency.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the process of making soft
cheese
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 is a very complicated process involving many steps.
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, the final product is a very soft
cheese
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, which is
dilicious
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delicious
 o eat.
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