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in some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studied

#countries #people #work #travel #year #school #university
There is no doubt these days several countries provide support for their youngsters to get
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year
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 graduating high school and starting
university
 to travel or
work
 for one
year
 . The question is , what is the most effective for
students
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year
 or go to travel and
work
? In
this
 essay , I am going to discuss both of
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 benefits and drawbacks . In terms of advantages are effective for teenagers to have
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work
 and discover
thier
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their
 career during
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year
morover
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, they can get more experience , soft
skills
 , self-confidence and cooperation through
this
year
 . The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that youngsters have an issue with financial stability
therefore
, it would be
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 decision than that . To illustrate , there are surveys in advanced countries published about
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year
 for their
students
 they believe that
students
 need a
year
 between high school and starting
university
 to develop
thier
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their
skills
 towards utilizes in their careers in
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 world , the several
yougsters
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youngsters
 it would
be have
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skills
 to
using
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 in a
university
 or a
work
 they will have
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 to resolve any issues if facing them in future .
Moreover
 , there are
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arguments
individual
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 people
to take
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a
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students
 get
gab
year
 there
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downside
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 to
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 one
year
 without study for
students
 many
searched
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 says it would be more
worest
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worst
 for
yougsters
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youngsters
 they are going be lazy without study
moreover
, the
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youngsters
 do not get
gab
year
 have
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 opportunity to admission
university
 easily. In conclusion,
although
 might some
students
 will have some
problem
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 with
this
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 drawbacks but the best
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 for them is
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gab
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gap
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year
 to improve their
skills
 and more development
therefore
 , I
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believe
that the
avantages
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advantages
 of
this
 problem get better
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 the
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disadvantages
.
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