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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the
imformation
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information
of
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on
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 how many tourists
who
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apply
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visited a Caribbean
island
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 from the year
of
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apply
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2010 to 2017, which showed
clear
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a clear
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insite
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insight
of
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into
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 the difference between visitors staying on cruise ships and staying on
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island
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the island
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. On the one hand, the total number of people who went to
this
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island
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 has a steady
increading
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increasing
, from 1 million in 2010 to 3.5 million in 2017, especially the year from 2016 to 2017, which
have
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has
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 the most rapid rise in the given period of time.
On the other hand
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, the lines of
travelers
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travellers
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 who chose to stay on
ship
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a ship
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 or
island
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, both showed
flactuations
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fluctuations
,
however
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, the
amount
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number
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 of people who prefer staying on
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island
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the island
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were
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was
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 more than
staying
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those staying
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 on ships before the middle of 2015, after which, the trend indicated that the majority of the people are in
favor
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favour
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 of staying on the ships. In
conclustion
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conclusion
, the graph imply
the
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that
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 the tendency of tourist preference is changing
though
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through
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 the given years, even though the consistency of increasing numbers, the tourist who chose to stay on the ship are more favourable than
stay
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those stay
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 on the
island
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, which may reveal the travelers' concerns about security.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • gradual increase
  • sharp decline
  • steady growth
  • plateau
  • seasonal variation
  • external influences
  • tourist influx
  • sustainable tourism
  • economic impact
  • hospitality industry
  • travel restrictions
  • visitor statistics
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