The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year

The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year
The bar chart illustrates the percentages of
men
and women who were hired for different types of jobs in the country of Australia in the past year .
Overall
, We can see that
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were hired for All different kinds of Jobs and were the first choice for most
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employers except for two sections where more women were dominant than
men
. Different types of jobs like Clerical and Tradespeople were more successful for
men
approximately (900) and behind them were just Manager positions and the Professional sector approximately(600). Women, on the other ,hand didn't get much work as
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production and trades approximately (100).Their percentages are certainly lower than those of the opposite Gender. The clerical sort of occupation is the most fortunate for the Females (almost 1000), Leading with some percentages of pro work.
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