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Essay type: Discussion Theme: Some people feel that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is a better in the countryside.

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Many population think, that it is good living in the city, but others reckon living in the village. In my, opinion, the first thought is good. Few people choose to live in the countryside because there are few cars and
therefore
 the air in there is fresh. That's why many folks who live in the drop are clever and healthy because their brain breathes fresh air. And one of the good sides of living there is quietly because
although
 the area is large few nations live here and
therefore
there
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it's mostly quiet here resulting in the public's nerves
will be
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being
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 bent. Some decide the
living
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 in the town and one of the good sides of living there is comfort because it is developed and the crowd know how to live because folk have seen engineering and they want
this
. As a ,result humans
tostarts
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 respect themselves. community fixed
this
 because there good education
because
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 educated families do not want to work and live in the countryside they will choose to live in the borough. If the nation strangles the formation of
village
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villages
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 people
moved
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there and the whole country becomes the burg.
To conclude
 though living in the countryside is good and useful, in my opinion living in the city can develop not only a person but
also
 the state. Ball-5.0
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