The graphs below show the pos-school qualifications held by Australian in the age groups 25 to 34 and 55 to 69

The graphs below show the pos-school qualifications held by Australian in the age groups 25 to 34 and 55 to 69
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The charts provide information about the degrees that have been
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by Australians in the nine main fields of study(Administration; Social
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and
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; Law; Medicine; Architecture; Engineering; Veterinary and Agriculture; Science, Maths, and Computers; and Education), split by two different ages categories (25 to 34 and 55 to 69 years old).
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, Social
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the most popular subjects for both groups. In the younger group, Architecture has the least number of people,
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in the older generation Veterinary and Agriculture are the least common subjects. Regarding the 25 to 34 aged group, there are 357,500
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,
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Social
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, Administration, and Science, Maths, Computers rank
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stand with more than 15%
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of people.
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, Education at just under 15%,
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the other categories
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only under 10% of individuals. Turning to the aged category between 55 and 69, the number of people is 104,800 with the highest percentage in Social
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a little above 20%,
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followed by Engineering at just below 20%.
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, Administration, Education, Medicine, and Science, Maths, Computers are responsible for only under 15 per cent of individuals,
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the other categories have only less than 5%.
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