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A number of different medical traditions are now widely known and used: Western medicine (using drugs and surgery), herbal medicine, acupunture (using needles at certain points of the body), homoeopathy (using minute doses of poisons), and so on. How important is the patient's mental attitude towards his/her treatment in determining the effectiveness of the treatment? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Any type of
medicine
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western or traditional has its own advantages and disadvantages. Though some
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 are more effective
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less
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, the purpose of all the
medicines
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 is to treat the
patient
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. I personally believe that any type of
medicine
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 if taken under proper guidance will benefit the consumer, irrespective of
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western or traditional. It all depends on the
persons
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 thinking towards it. Nowadays because of rapid growth in
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the medical
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 field,
number
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 of new
medicines
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 are coming in a very short period of time. People generally don’t have that much knowledge about each
medicine
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 that comes in
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 market. It leads to
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confusion and
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 people go with the traditional treatments that are already proven and used widely. Going by the traditional method they feel safe and it generates a positive flow within their mind and which in turn helps them to recover faster.
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, because of the advanced technology and research,
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 possible to cure and treat some of the diseases that were not possible to treat with the traditional methods. Not only the major diseases but research has proven that fever, cough,
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and cold
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 can have types like from pollution, from food and so on. So going by
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 method which was unable to distinguish between the actual cause may take
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patient
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the patient
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 longer to heal, but if
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patient’s
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the patient’s
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 mentality towards the traditional
medicine
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 is more positive than some of the modern
medicines
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 available
then
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patient
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the patient
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 would choose the traditional way and it may heal him/her faster than some of the modern
medicines
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 available in the market. So
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patient’s
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the patient’s
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 mentality plays a very important role
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 the effectiveness of the treatment the
patient
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 is undergoing.
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