some companies sponsor support as a way to advertise themselves. some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. discuss both side and give your opinion.

Nowadays,we can see
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in our daily life
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, on
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buildings
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our
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there
is
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some
people
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works are about advertising, in
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other words, give information
their
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company to
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people
.
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, propaganda became a part of life,
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some
people
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not happy with
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situation to contrast with
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positive
perspective and believes it has benefit. In following the sentences, I will explain both beliefs and will give my opinion. On the one hand, there
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some
people
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problem
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a problem
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with it, their reason would be their time of life
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their phone takes a lot of time for advertising, even in their home
becouse
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because
advertiser come and do advertise. It will
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people
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when they
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want
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won't
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do their work and job, insomuch they face with it.
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when
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open one site
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the internet
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I have to delete lots of propaganda and I
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focus
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my topic and
also
when we
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film
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or
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sport
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competition.
On the other hand
, advertising
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some advantages that
others
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people
like them and do not have
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difficulty
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advantages might get amused
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it since
,
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when sponsors want to get attention, make funny or musical for being attractive.
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like it.
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, in my point of view,
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everything should
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. Personally, I enjoy
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some
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,
although
if it is too much and long I would get annoyed. I think some
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opinion
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me.
Submitted by y.maryam.2004 on

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