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some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. how might having a lot of money make people happy? what other things in life can make people happy?

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plenty of individuals hold the idea that possessing a great amount of
money
 is the major reason to be happy. I personally opine that having
money
 usually brings self-confidence and
power
 which are the most important reasons that bring happiness to
people
.
However
, having a
supporting
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 family and a healthy body have undeniable effects on
people
's good
feeling
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feelings
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. Being rich provides you
the
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with the
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 opportunity to purchase almost everything you want that most
people
 often can't afford and it brings
conscious
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a conscious
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 or unconscious sense of
power
. Wealthy
people
 can wear more fashionable,
costy
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costly
cosy
 clothes and accessories
such
 as watches and sunglasses or are able to drive luxurious cars and reside in
million dollar
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 houses.
Therefore
, they feel they can gain whatever they desire
and
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which
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 creates
the
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a
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 sense of confidence.Having the
power
 to achieve what you want creates satisfaction and joy,
say
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says
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Dr.
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Dr
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 Hawking the professor of psychology and hypnoses based on the results of his recent research.
Although
,
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 the importance of wealth is
undenyable
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undeniable
, there are fundamental factors that can always bring cheer like a supportive family and being mentally and physically healthy when encountering an issue, you will need a confidant, reliable person who can consult you and come up with a solution and who can be a better option
that
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than
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 a family member who has been through ups and downs with you?
Moreover
, suffering from incurable illnesses
such
 as some types of
cancers
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cancer
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 or HIV will keep you far away from enjoying your dear
money
 when you are in pain. In conclusion, many are of the opinion that
money
 equals happiness.
Although
, it can build self-confidence and
Power
, having a trustable folk and
healthy
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a healthy
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 body are the other ways to have the same feeling.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial security
  • Basic needs
  • Comfort
  • Luxury
  • Freedom
  • Altruistic
  • Philanthropy
  • Nurturing relationships
  • Fulfillment
  • Sense of accomplishment
  • Physical well-being
  • Spiritual beliefs
  • Community involvement
  • Gratitude
  • Mindfulness
  • Simple pleasures
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