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The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015.

The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015.
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The table gives information about percentages of people with and without a job, with
college
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a college
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 or university education and
average
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the average
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salary
 in eight different
countries
 in Europe.
Overall
, we can see that there are two groups of
countries
, half of the
country
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countries
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 have high
salary
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salaries
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 and low unemployment and half have low
salary
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salaries
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 and high unemployment. The first group of
countries
 is Austria, Luxembourg, Norway and
UK
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the UK
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. All of them have
more
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a more
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 than 70% employment rate except
from
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for
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 Luxembourg which
it
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apply
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has 66.1%.
Furthermore
, all four have more than 40%
people
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of people
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 with a degree except
from
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apply
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Austria at 30.6%.
Finally
, all four have
average
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an average
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salary
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salaries
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 above 20000
euroes
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euros
 and Norway is the highest
salary
 at 41483
euroes
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euros
. The other group is Bulgaria, Greece, Latvia and Portugal. All of them have less than
70
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a 70
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% Employment rate and Greece is
lowest
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the lowest
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 which
it
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apply
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is 50.8%. With regard to education, all of them have less than 30% of the population who are
gradutes
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graduates
 except
from
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apply
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Latvia where
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the gradute
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gradute
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graduate
 rate is 31.6%.
Finally
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,Finally
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 all four of the
countries
 have an average
salary
 of
less
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fewer
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 than ten thousand
euroes
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euros
 and Bulgaria has
lowest
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the lowest
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 at 3332.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salary, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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