Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In these present days, there are a bunch of improvements that affect education. It is often argued that the community feels that learning
History
is better for students, whilst others believe that
Science
and
Technology
are more valuable, especially in the modern era. In my opinion, I believe that
Science
and
Technology
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bigger value, though learning
History
is
also
required. To start with, there are several reasons why people think that
History
is more important. Studying
History
benefits us
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understanding past events that created things
those
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we see, use, or feel today. It
also
helps us to appreciate human behaviours, which
needed
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in order to understand our surroundings.
In addition
, some are afraid because
majority
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of young people
are began
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to forget the
history
of their own country.
However
, several people think that
Science
and
Technology
are overriding than
History
.
This
is
also
true since skills
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Science
and
Technology
are required in
large scale
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of
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jobs that have
big
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impact on today's society. The world
are
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growing more advanced as time progresses with the assistance of
Science
and
Technology
, which shows in advancements of
internet
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the internet
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, medicinal growth, and better quality of education, engineering, architecture, and agriculture. In order to give contributions to society, students have to learn
this
part of
school
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subject.
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my personal perspective, I lean more
to
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the importance of
Science
and
Technology
than
History
. I believe that
Science
and
Technology
are more needed in
this
era, but in spite of that,
History
also
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necessary to be taught in school, so that students do not forget about their
history
and culture.
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  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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