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Some parents believe that home schooling is more beneficial than the traditional schools. What is your opinion.

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People
 have different views about the impact of the
Internet
 on the way how
people
 communicate with each other.
While
 some of them argue that it makes
people
 isolated,I believe that it helps to get closer. On the one hand,it can ве true that because of the impact of the
internet
people
 now prefer to stay alone rather than having face-to-face meetings.As the aim of the
internet
 is to make easier
people
’s lives,it allows
people
 to communicate distantly.
As a result
,it is better to stay at home and having meetings through the net rather than going out and wasting time.
Thus
, providing opportunities
such
 as communicating, and even having business meetings online let
people
 be isolated.
On the other hand
,I believe that the
internet
 is now more and more bringing
people
 together.
Firstly
,it gives a chance to keep in touch with anyone who is far away.
For example
,anyone can have a relative from other countries or cities and it can be important to have communication with them.
Secondly
,it gives an opportunity to make friends from all over the world.Nowadays it is popular to chat with foreigners through social media,which
also
 helps to get more acquaintances.
Finally
, communication online makes
people
 feel comfortable and safe.As there are enough introverted
people
 who prefer not to talk face to face, the
internet
 creates a safe atmosphere for them. In conclusion,it seems to me that
internet
 makes
people
 closer to each other as having an opportunity to chat online has no big impact on
people
’s isolation.
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