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Some parents believe that home schooling is more beneficial than the traditional schools. What is your opinion.

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People
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 have different views about the impact of the
Internet
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 on the way how
people
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 communicate with each other.
While
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 some of them argue that it makes
people
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 isolated,I believe that it helps to get closer. On the one hand,it can ве true that because of the impact of the
internet
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people
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 now prefer to stay alone rather than having face-to-face meetings.As the aim of the
internet
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 is to make easier
people
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’s lives,it allows
people
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 to communicate distantly.
As a result
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,it is better to stay at home and having meetings through the net rather than going out and wasting time.
Thus
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, providing opportunities
such
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 as communicating, and even having business meetings online let
people
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 be isolated.
On the other hand
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,I believe that the
internet
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 is now more and more bringing
people
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 together.
Firstly
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,it gives a chance to keep in touch with anyone who is far away.
For example
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,anyone can have a relative from other countries or cities and it can be important to have communication with them.
Secondly
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,it gives an opportunity to make friends from all over the world.Nowadays it is popular to chat with foreigners through social media,which
also
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 helps to get more acquaintances.
Finally
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, communication online makes
people
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 feel comfortable and safe.As there are enough introverted
people
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 who prefer not to talk face to face, the
internet
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 creates a safe atmosphere for them. In conclusion,it seems to me that
internet
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 makes
people
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 closer to each other as having an opportunity to chat online has no big impact on
people
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’s isolation.
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