The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart and table illustrate the
number
of foreign students in universities in the USA, UK, Australia, and Canada in 2004 and after eight years. The measurements were in thousands.
Overall
,the
number
of juniors abroad increased in each country,
however
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the percentage of them
of
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all recruitment did not change so much.
For instance
, USA's rates show a similar per cent in both years. The differences between how many people from other countries study in UK and America raised by 100 000 till 2012,
while
Australia's rates consisted of about 70 000 over the same years.
On the other hand
, the
number
of international students in Canada did not depict huge changes, it was a little bit less than 50 thousand in 2004 and grew by about 25 000. There was only 2 per cent of foreign people of the total
number
of undergraduates who had courses in the USA in 2004 and
this
measurement stayed constant in 2012.
Nevertheless
, the percentage of exchange students was 19 in Australia at the beginning of the timeline and it was up to 24 per cent
at the end
.
Moreover
,
UK
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demonstrated
the
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growth of 4%,
whereas
Canada only 2%.
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