These days people do not go out for live performances or concerts and they prefer to enjoy watching them on computers or laptops. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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of technology, people can watch live

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sitting in concerts, they need to purchase entry tickets.

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on laptops, they are able to save money because

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paramount benefit is that when

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modern era, most

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mortals can go outside,

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watching live performances at

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prefer to stay

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than going outside for watching concerts as shows.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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These days people do not go out for live performances or concerts and they prefer to enjoy watching them on computers or laptops. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Fully explain your ideas

Recent research has shown that business meetings and trainings are increasingly taking place online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this.

People use the internet for medical advice and to do medical check ups rather than directly meeting with doctors in an office Why are they using the internet for this? Discuss you viewpoints on this.

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.