These days people do not go out for live performances or concerts and they prefer to enjoy watching them on computers or laptops. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Nobody can deny that technology has can

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surged dramatically, in

this

cutting-edge epoch, individuals have no need to go outside for watching shows and concerts as they can watch at

home

on their TV and Computers. I totally agree with

this

nation.

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with, owing to

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of technology, people can watch live

performance

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at

home

instead

of

ging

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outside. Because of

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schedule, they prefer to watch at

home

in order to save their time.

In addition

to

this

, if they stay at

home

, it provides

opportunity

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to

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them

utilizing

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time with their family members in

this

restless routine which leads to family

bond

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strong between them. Probing ahead, the first and foremost merit is that when humans stay at

home

then

they are capable to save their money.

Due to

sitting in concerts, they need to purchase entry tickets.

However

,

povided

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provided

that they watch at

home

on laptops, they are able to save money because

internet

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is

inexpensive

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source. The

another

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paramount benefit is that when

humenbeings

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human beings

want to watch at

home

,

pollution

complication

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would be reduced. In

this

modern era, most

of

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people prefer to use public vehicles rather than public transport that attribute to increasing cause of

pollution

. Yet, when they

lives

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at

home

then

they don't have heed to use private

as well as

public transportation. As a repercussion,

pollution

problems

ase

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are

likely to be resolved. To recapitulate it, arguments on aforementioned above one can reach to

logical

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conclusion is that

although

is that

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although

mortals can go outside,

But

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watching live performances at

home

not only aid to save money and time, but

also

assit

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assist

to reduce the issue of

pollution

and

i

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also

prefer to stay

home

than going outside for watching concerts as shows.