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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph highlights the
year
 between 2010 and 2017
number
 of visitors
in
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to
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 a Caribbean
island
. In
total
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a total
the total
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number
 of
tourists
are
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is
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upwarding
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upward
upwards
;
however
,
visitors
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the visitors
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 staying on
island
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the island
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 are decreasing in the rate. In a nutshell, In the
year
2010
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,2010
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 no one stayed in the ship till 2013.
In other words
, the curve is showing the minus
visitor's
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visitor
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 percentage till the
year
 2013. From 2014 staying in the ship's graph line was increasing till 2017.
On the other hand
,
tourists
 who spent their nights
in
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on
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 the
island
was
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were
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 not very famous either in 2010;
Although
, From the
year
 2013 people started passing their nights
in
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on
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 the
island
. And,
this
 trend was
upwarding
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upward
upwards
 till 2014. Unless, in the
year
 2016 the trending was failed
into
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to
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 1.25
million
.
Whereas
 visitor
of
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to
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 the ships was 1.5
million
 in the same
year
. Between 2015 to 2016
number
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a number
the number
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 of
tourists
 who stayed
in
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on
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 the ships and who spent their nights
in
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on
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 the
island
 are intersecting
each
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with each
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 other. When the
number
 of percentage of
the
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apply
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people who stayed
in
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on
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 the
island
 was
decreaed
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decreased
created
 by .25
million
, the
number
 of
the
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apply
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visitor's
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visitors
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 percentage was increased by .50
million
.
In addition
, in total the
number
 of tourist trend was
uptrending
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trending
. From 2010 to 2017 the rate of
the
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apply
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tourists
 was 1
million
 to 3.5
million
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, number, island, tourists, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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