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The chart compares the international students among eight different Canadian province graduates in 2001 and 2006 years.

The chart compares the international students among eight different Canadian province graduates in 2001 and 2006 years.
The chart compares the international
students
Use synonyms
among
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from
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 eight different Canadian
province
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provinces
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 graduates in 2001 and 2006 years.
Overall
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, New Brunswick, Nova Scotia and British Columbia had the highest percentage of
students
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. In 2001, New Brunswick, Nova Scotia,
Quebec’s
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and Quebec’s
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 international graduates were similar with almost 6% each. After, figures increased to about 12%, just over 10%, and nearly 7% respectively. Alberta and British
columbia
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Columbia
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students
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 had just under 5%
students
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 in 2001.
However
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, Alberta went up to about 7%,
while
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 British Columbia had
the
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a
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 high increase to almost 11% in 2006. Manitoba, Newfoundland and Labrador and Ontario had similar changes in two years. figures had about 3% graduates in 2001
,
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apply
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 and
then
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 increased to approximately nearly 6%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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