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Some people believe that robots will play an important role in future societies, while others argue that robots might have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
robot
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the robot
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 is increasingly developing. it is not difficult to see
robots
 serving in restaurants or in ordinary
home
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homes
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. The use of
robots
 as an alternative to
people
's daily
task
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in
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is
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 becoming more and more popular. Some
people
 believe that
robots
 will play an important role in future societies,
while
 others agree that
robots
 might have negative effects on society.
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 essay, I will raise both the positive and negative of
robots
, and give my own opinion on the above point of view On the one hand,
robots
 can replace
humans
 in performing dangerous jobs
such
 as volcano exploration or those containing
toxics
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.
In addition
,
robots
 can replace
humans
 in simple tasks
such
 as housework and childcare. In medicine,
robots
 are
also
 used in simple surgeries. Taking my uncle as an example, he is extremely busy with his work, so his chores can't be done. and he bought a robot vacuum cleaner to help him work.
On the other hand
,
robots
 replacing
humans
 with simple jobs can
also
 pose a great risk of losing
people
's
job
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jobs
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, from which many
people
 lose their jobs.
This
 can lead to income imbalance, high poverty rates and increase crime rates, endangering society. Taking my aunt
an
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 example, she worked for a food packaging
company
 but after 3 years, she and her coworkers are laid off on the ground
that
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 the
company
 used
robots
instead
 of workers In my viewpoint,
robots
 can replace
humans
 in the fields of medicine, science and technology, ... but if
robots
 replace
humans
 completely,
that is
 one thing dangerous. Taking America's
company
 as an example, the
company
 shut down two new generation
robots
 because it discovered that these 2
robots
 communicated with each other in
new
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 language created by them. In conclusion,
robots
brings
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 a lot of benefits to
humans
, but at the same time,there are
also
 extremely high risks in term of
economy
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the economy
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 and society. We need to use
robots
 in a reasonable and limited way to occur risks in the future
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  • Automation
  • Cybernetics
  • Efficiency
  • Job displacement
  • Manual labor
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  • Technological advancements
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