Today people are surrounded by advertising. This affects what people think as important and has a negative impact on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? Give reasons f

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It is true that some

people

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argue for population lives surrounded by advertisements, and

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is a strike for

people

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who believe

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important and affects

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live

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I accept that it may suit many

people

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, I believe that it has benefits for several reasons. On the one hand, ads provide us with new information or new products.

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, in

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era, if we live without advertisements, it looks like we don’t know everything about something

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important and it is happening. The adverse

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us a chance to choose the better goods that we could buy that follow the trends from the wide range

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available.

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, I recently purchased a phone, and before I go to buy

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smartphone, I

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watched the advertising before to add information about it.

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, it will have a negative impact

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humans who want to buy something without seeing the insight before. In

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case, for advertising

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apply

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they show

about

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apply

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new products

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as new skincare.

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advertising gives us an interesting term, for that reason our mind thinks we must buy that product,

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it is not our needs and might be high priced.

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, the new skincare from a brand that shows the best ingredients inside to make our skin great and

brightening

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, the price of that product is expensive. In conclusion, adverts have their advantages

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disadvantages. In my view, it aids

people

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to get insight about a product,

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sometimes it will be a drawback for several situations.

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