Today people are surrounded by advertising. This affects what people think as important and has a negative impact on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? Give reasons f

It is true that some
people
argue for population lives surrounded by advertisements, and
this
is a strike for
people
who believe
that is
important and affects
human’s
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live
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.
While
I accept that it may suit many
people
, I believe that it has benefits for several reasons. On the one hand, ads provide us with new information or new products.
Therefore
, in
this
era, if we live without advertisements, it looks like we don’t know everything about something
that is
important and it is happening. The adverse
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us a chance to choose the better goods that we could buy that follow the trends from the wide range
that is
available.
For example
, I recently purchased a phone, and before I go to buy
this
smartphone, I
have
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watched the advertising before to add information about it.
On the other hand
, it will have a negative impact
for
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humans who want to buy something without seeing the insight before. In
this
case, for advertising
that
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they show
about
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new products
such
as new skincare.
This
advertising gives us an interesting term, for that reason our mind thinks we must buy that product,
although
it is not our needs and might be high priced.
For example
, the new skincare from a brand that shows the best ingredients inside to make our skin great and
brightening
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.
However
, the price of that product is expensive. In conclusion, adverts have their advantages
as well as
disadvantages. In my view, it aids
people
to get insight about a product,
however
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sometimes it will be a drawback for several situations.
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