Today people are surrounded by advertising. This affects what people think as important and has a negative impact on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? Give reasons f
It is true that some
people
argue for population lives surrounded by advertisements, and this
is a strike for people
who believe that is
important and affects human’s
Change noun form
human
live
. Replace the word
lives
While
I accept that it may suit many people
, I believe that it has benefits for several reasons.
On the one hand, ads provide us with new information or new products. Therefore
, in this
era, if we live without advertisements, it looks like we don’t know everything about something that is
important and it is happening. The adverse give
us a chance to choose the better goods that we could buy that follow the trends from the wide range Correct subject-verb agreement
gives
that is
available. For example
, I recently purchased a phone, and before I go to buy this
smartphone, I have
watched the advertising before to add information about it.
Unnecessary verb
apply
On the other hand
, it will have a negative impact for
humans who want to buy something without seeing the insight before. In Change preposition
on
this
case, for advertising that
they show Correct pronoun usage
apply
about
new products Change preposition
apply
such
as new skincare. This
advertising gives us an interesting term, for that reason our mind thinks we must buy that product, although
it is not our needs and might be high priced. For example
, the new skincare from a brand that shows the best ingredients inside to make our skin great and brightening
. Replace the word
bright
However
, the price of that product is expensive.
In conclusion, adverts have their advantages as well as
disadvantages. In my view, it aids people
to get insight about a product, however
sometimes it will be a drawback for several situations.Add a comma
,however
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