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The table below shows the average percentage of household income spent on food in specific countries. The percentages shown in the table below are separated by ten year intervals. Write a report describing the information below.

The table below shows the average percentage of household income spent on food in specific countries. The percentages shown in the table below are separated by ten year intervals. Write a report describing the information below.
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The provided table illustrates statistical information concerning the average proportion of
household
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income
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 spent on food in five
countries
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 like France, Japan, Korea, Mexico and the USA between 1950 and 2000. As can be seen from the chart, over time,
household
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 incomes spent on food trend of decline in most of the
countries
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 except Mexico in 2000. The percentage of Japanese
household
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income
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 is the second highest at 30.3% in 1950.
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, in 2000, the
number
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 dramatically falls by 7.4% without a break over the given period, there is the second lowest of the five
countries
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 the
number
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.
Likewise
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, the rate of the US
household
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income
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 is a rapid decrease by 14.4%p from 20.6% in 1950 to 6.2% in 2000 over the same period. The
number
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 always is the lowest over every interval. The proportion of Korean
household
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income
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 in 1950 is the highest at 30.4%, and grow to 37.1% in 1960. The
number
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 is the highest until 1970. From 1960, the
number
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 by 21.7%p to 8.7% until 2000, there is only the third highest of the other
countries
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' numbers. In 1950, like in Korea, the ratio of French
household
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income
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 is 29.6% and grow to 31.4% in 1960. And
then
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, there
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 falls by 19.3% from 31.4% to 10.3% until 2000. In 1980, the French
number
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 is the highest. The proportion of Mexico
also
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 decrease from 1950 to 1990,
whereas
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 there increase by 5.4% from 19.5% in 1990 to 24.9% in 2000. The
number
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 is the highest and is over double the second highest.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words household, income, countries, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "falls" was used 2 times.
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