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Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The figure compares the amount of electricity generated by
energy
source
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sources
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last
year
 with the
last
 two decades in Scotland.
It is clear that
 the major
energy
 source in
both
periods
 was coal with 41,4% for 20 years, and 32,7%
last
year
;
whereas
 oil and
hydro pumped
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 storage accounted for the smallest portions in
both
periods
, between 2,1% and 4%. The highest decrease was in the usage of coal and oil, with the amount of oil
halvened
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halved
 the
last
year
, and coal lessened
more
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 than 8%. Roughly 1/5 of
energy
 was gained through
gas
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the gas
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 in
both
periods
,
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 and approximately 8% through hydro natural flow. Other renewable energies almost doubled
last
year
 from 2,8% to 5,1%;
as
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another significant source as being nuclear
energy
 increased from 19.6% to 26,4%. In summary, it is obvious that the main
energy
 sources coal, gas and nuclear remained the most important ones in
both
 time spans, with almost 90% in the
last
 two decades and around 80%
the
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last
year
. Usage of renewable energies stayed almost the same with approximately 15% in
both
periods
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • pattern
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • similarity
  • difference
  • fluctuation
  • outlier
  • exception
  • significant
  • noteworthy
  • highlight
  • summarize
  • data
  • feature
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