The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
The given line chart was selected from a 2008 report that illustrates the
consumption
of six different fuel energies in the USA
during
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1980 to 2030.
Overall
, the data from that report shows the trend of five fuel energies except hydropower
are
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upward.
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, petrol and oil
is
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the most energy
that is
used by people in the USA.
However
, nuclear, solar/wind
,
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and hydropower are at the bottom of
energy
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types that people consume. The
number of
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consumption
of petrol and oil fluctuated between 35 from 1980 to 32 in 1995. After
that
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it was a sharp rise until 2023, at 45.
Moreover
, it is predicted that
consumption
may reach 50 quadrillion. For coal and natural
gas
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the
consumption
number started at 15 and 20 respectively. Between 1980 to 2015
the
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both of which had a fluctuation and coal took over the natural gas. It is estimated that the trend of coal might be upward and reach more than 30,
while
for natural gas
this
trend may remain steady. For other types of energy
consumption
namely, nuclear, solar/wind, and hydropower their trends are very close to each other.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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