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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
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the map illustrates how the industrial
area
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 in the town of Norbiton
designed
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 for future growth. There will be several changes,the most noticeable will be the increases in accommodation , the elimination of the factory , and the introduction of other facilities.
Overall
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 , Norbiton industrial
area
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 is located
eastest
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east
easiest
 side of the town. There is a river crossing in the
nortest
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northeast
northwest
 of the town and it separates from farmland and industrial
area
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. There are several buildings surrounding the roads. South furthest there is a main road. The outline of future growth depicts the significant growth and modifications of inclusive infrasture of the
area
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 between the farmland and
main
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the main
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 road.
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 it replaces
the
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factories with houses.
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 , the roads have been developed to
accomadate
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accommodate
 the new buildings. It includes shops ,
play ground
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, medical centre and school .
secondly
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 , there will be a roundabout in
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the soutest
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soutest
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southeast
southwest
stoutest
 of the map and
middle
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the middle
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 of
main
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the main
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 road and there will be a bridge between farmland and
industrial
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the industrial
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area
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top
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on top
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 of the river.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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