The chart below shows the percentage of household in owned and rented accommodation in England and wales between 1918 and 2011.

The chart below shows the percentage of household in owned and rented accommodation in England and wales between 1918 and 2011.
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The chart illustrates the differences between 1918 and 2011
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households in owned and rented accommodation percentages in England and Wales.
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, it is noticeable that the percentages of 1918 to 1961 , throughout
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the rented
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were higher and owned
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were lesser than it. The only instance year the latter number was
same
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is in 1971.
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, from 1918 to 2011
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contrary
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the previous years by the owned
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was higher than the rented
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. The 1918 percentage was about 77% in rented reconciliation and about 23% in owned reconciliation . followed by ,
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1939 and 1953 which was the same percentage for rented and owned reconciliation by 68% and 31% respectively. Meanwhile , in 1961 had a gradual decrease
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about 59% for rented and about 41% for owned
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.
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, the owned accommodation
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steadily increasing from 1981 and had a fluctuation in 2011. In 1981 was 60%
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owned and 40%
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rented
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.
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increased by 68% in 1991 and 69% in 2001. Meanwhile, had fluctuations for rented accommodation and
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had
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outraced percentage in 2011.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words compromise with synonyms.
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