The table and graph below give information about cinema attendance in Australia between 1994 and 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and graph below give information about cinema attendance in Australia between 1994 and 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following table and graph demonstrate a breakdown of cinema
attendance
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and frequency
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different age groups in 5 certain years. It can be easily observed that annual
attendance
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inclined throughout the period
while
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the frequency of
visits
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underwent oscillations with an
overall
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decreasing trend. Going to the cinema for movies, at the same time, was most common among people from age 14-24
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those aged 35-49 were the least. Regarding the table's data, the proportion of the population attending the cinema saw a noticeable rise and remained stable at 72% with a slight dip to 70% in 2000. The number of
visits
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per year witnessed a less significant increase around the same period, followed by a slight drop of 3
visits
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to 8.3 in 1998 before stabilizing for the remainder of the time. In terms of the line graph's data, the number of cinemagoers of all age segments increased from 1994 to
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in 1996, at approximately 10-15
visits
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before it fell to the lowest
attendance
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recorded in 1998, at around 5-8
visits
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. A slight rise was witnessed in all surveyed ages from 1998 to 2002, with individuals from 14-24 years old at the top
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10
visits
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annually.
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other groups, except for 35-49 year-olds that have the lowest
attendance
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with an average of 6
visits
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, reflected the national average of 7-8
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Vocabulary: Replace the words attendance, visits with synonyms.
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