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Some people think the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #cost #fuel
Globally, governments are facing a lot of environmental problems
due to
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 of hydrocarbon
fuel
. The more
fuel
 is used, the higher the effects of environmental
problem
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.
Although
 a quick solution to lower
the
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fuel
usage
 is to increase the
cost
 of
fuel
, I disagree with
this
 statement for 2 reasons.
Firstly
, increasing the
cost
 of
fuel
 will only lead to
higher
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a higher
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cost
 of living. Corporations and business owners will absorb the high
price
 of
fuel
 and pass on the high
cost
 back to consumers.
This
 will increase the
price
 of goods and services that they provide as they would need to maintain their profit margin. End users will have to bear the higher
cost
 of living.
Secondly
, these environmental problems can only be reduced if
usage
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the usage
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 of
fuel
 is reduced. Rather than increasing the
fuel
price
,
government
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the government
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 must provide the facility and incentives to develop alternatives to
fuel
. A tax concession for companies that explore and produce alternative energy is a powerful way to do
this
. It is of great benefit for companies to chase these tax
concession
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concessions
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 to provide alternative
fuel
 to customers,
thus
 decreasing
fuel
usage
while
 increasing their profits. In conclusion, increasing
fuel
price
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prices
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 will only lead to other problems. Government must look at ways to reduce
the
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fuel
usage
through
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 exploring
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alternative
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alterative
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alternative
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fuel
, and not by increasing the
cost
, as
this
 will lead to
higher
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a higher
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cost
 of living
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