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The percentage of 3 types of crimes: car theft, house burglary & street robbery in England & Wales from 1970 to 2000.

The percentage of 3 types of crimes: car theft, house burglary & street robbery in England & Wales from 1970 to 2000.
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The chart illustrates how high the British proportions of
theft
 were across 3 specific kinds of crimes over a
period
 of 3 decades from 1970.
Overall
, proportionally, street robbery showed a
period
 of stability throughout the given timeframe,
whereas
 those by the rest rose by varying degrees, with the most pronounced elevation being seen in car
theft
, which ended up as the charge with the most prevalent by far. Looking first at the percentages of car
theft
 and house burglary, the former commenced the
period
 with its highest statistics at roughly 0.4%, which was 0.1% more than the corresponding figure for the latter, at nearly 0.3%.
Thereafter
, the former witnessed a precipitous increase to 1.4% in 1985
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 and an ultimate decrease to 0.8% towards the end. Similar changes, but to a lesser extent, can be observed in the latter's share, ending at about 0.4% after 30 years, reaching parity with the starting point of car
theft
, after hitting a peak of 0.6% in 1990. Turning
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street robbery,
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reportedly accounted for 0.1% in 1970 and remained stable throughout the years. Despite fluctuations, it maintained a plateau towards the end of
this
period
.
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