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to manage without my phone for a week. The phone is a huge part of my life. I do everything with it,
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a lot of people in the modern world
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. The first main thing which I
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in my device is the alarm clock. I have the several times
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because I can’t wake up from the first time. If I put an alarm clock in
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, I wouldn’t put
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the morning. The second important thing
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is
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. I do everything with the music: work, cleaning, do
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sport,
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any devices which be able to translate my lovely songs to wireless headphones. It seems not a big problem, but I believe, that without
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music is my communication with friends, we change
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new trends and
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with each other and discuss
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this
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is my job. I’m
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and I live among
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. In
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). I must be online,
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with my bosses, contractors,
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. Inevitably, I would be online even
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my vacation. In
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addition, the camera is
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basic thing in my work. I can’t imagine what I would do without
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the elements or references with my colleagues. In conclusion, I would say, that the experience is unbelievable.
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my anxiety because I would
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of touch. Probably, it is a main thought that
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humanity thoroughly becomes attached to the phones, the computers, the technique
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