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a friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He /she has ask for your advice Write the letter to your friend in your letter explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer.

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Dear
nisha
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, I haven't seen you for a long time so I am very excited to meet you. know
your
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you're
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 going to
coming
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this
summer
 for the first time. I am very happy
to
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about that
Iam
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I am
 always ready to give
your
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you
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 some advice.
Camping
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 holiday is a wonderful idea.Especially
in
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this
summer
.I think not only do you want to
going
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go
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 camping
holiday
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on holiday
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 in
summer
 but
also
lot
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a lot
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 of people because
that is
best
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the best
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 time for people to enjoy
the
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apply
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life after
able
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being able
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 to see the views and meet a
lot
 of people.
that is
 a chance for you to understand more
a
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lot
 of
culture
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the culture
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 in our country which you have never
know
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 before.the other reason is that you can take part you can in some social activities which are very interesting.
On the other hand
, going camping in the
summer
 has a
lot
 of disadvantages. In the first place, It will have
negative
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 impact on your skin so you have to
were
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be
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 hot before you going
to
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outside.
Secondly
, it is easy for you to be I'll because the weather in
summer
 is quite hot so you have to prepare medicines before. I hope that you can go on a camping holiday with me. Hope to meet you soon. Your close friend
Manusha
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Manisha
.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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