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Thanks to the development of air travel and telecommunication, contacts between different parts of the world have developed To what extent do you agree or disagree

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People
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 were
traveling
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 and
conecting
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connecting
 with
the
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others since ancient times, but
invention
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the invention
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 of the new technologies
as
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a
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 phone,
internet
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the internet
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 and new transportation systems made
huge
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 difference since it became much easier to reach long distances. I agree that
inovations
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innovations
 in communication and travel systems made a big difference and helped in building relations between
distanced
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 areas, so
for instance
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,
nowdays
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 there are a lot of
people
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 that are working from their homes for companies that are based in other countries or even on other
continets
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continents
.
Except that
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 we are able to travel very long distances in
very
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 short time thanks to
airplanes
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, so it is easier for
people
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 to visit different countries and exchange experiences in professional meaning, but
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 to stay close to friends or family that moved abroad. Internet, among other things, gave us
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possiblity
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possibility
 to meet and stay in touch with
people
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 that are based far away from us, so
people
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 are more keen to make new relationships.
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, during the COVID
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pandemic
pandemy
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 we
relized
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realized
realised
 that globalization can have negative effects too
,
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 since we had a lot of cases of spreading of
disease
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 during
the
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international trips.
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, we are witnesses
of
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 numerous negative effects of
internet
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the internet
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,
such
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 as security issues, lack of privacy,
behavioral
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 problems in kids, etc. In conclusion, air travel and telecommunication contributed to forming connections and contacts between different parts of
globe
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the globe
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, but we still need
be
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 aware of possible negative sides that are coming with those and try to mitigate their effects.
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