The charts show the distribution of the world’s water and use of water in three countries.

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Overall

, the pie chart represents the percentage of

water

supply around the world.

Similarly

, the bar graph gives information regarding the utilization of those distributed fluids in three different nations (Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada). At first glance, it can be clearly observed that the company 'All

Water

' supplies fresh

water

and salt

water

. Again, 'Fresh

Water

' deliver groundwater, surface

water

and ice and glaciers globally.

Further

, the Egyptians and the Arabians adopt those liquids in the same manner.

However

, there is exactly the opposite trend in Canada.

Moreover

, 'All

Water

' supplies a maximum percentage of salt

water

and less than five per cent of fresh

water

Also

, 'Fresh

Water

' delivers less than four-fifth of ice and glaciers, less than a fifth of groundwater and one per cent of surface

water

Further

, Egypt and Saudi Arabia utilize around a fifth of the liquid for agriculture, more than ten per cent in industrial areas.

Nevertheless

, Canadians use a fifth of those fluids in industries, one in ten for domestic reasons and less than one in ten for farms.

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