The charts show the distribution of the world’s water and use of water in three countries.

The charts show the distribution of the world’s water and use of water in three countries.
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Overall
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, the pie chart represents the percentage of
water
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supply around the world.
Similarly
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, the bar graph gives information regarding the utilization of those distributed fluids in three different nations (Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada). At first glance, it can be clearly observed that the company 'All
Water
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' supplies fresh
water
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and salt
water
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. Again, 'Fresh
Water
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' deliver groundwater, surface
water
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and ice and glaciers globally.
Further
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, the Egyptians and the Arabians adopt those liquids in the same manner.
However
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, there is exactly the opposite trend in Canada.
Moreover
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, 'All
Water
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' supplies a maximum percentage of salt
water
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and less than five per cent of fresh
water
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.
Also
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, 'Fresh
Water
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' delivers less than four-fifth of ice and glaciers, less than a fifth of groundwater and one per cent of surface
water
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.
Further
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, Egypt and Saudi Arabia utilize around a fifth of the liquid for agriculture, more than ten per cent in industrial areas.
Nevertheless
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, Canadians use a fifth of those fluids in industries, one in ten for domestic reasons and less than one in ten for farms.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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