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Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Governments could better spend this money on other things to benefit the nation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The
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 that uses to discover the earth is a waste of
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. Governments can spend their wealth on things that can help their country. In
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 essay, I will discuss both views and provide my perspective on
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 issue. On the one hand, The
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 spent on space is a waste of
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. I Partially disagree with
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 of exploring the Earth, Technological innovation, Space exploration has driven the development of new technologies that have practical applications in our daily lives. These innovations include advancements in materials science, medical technology, computer technology, and renewable energy sources.
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, Governments could spend their
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 on other things that can help their citizens. The ministry could spend its wealth on
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important stuff for its population to improve their quality of life.
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 as health care, Education, and Unemployment. There they can invest
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 on two sides equally. in conclusion, The
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 spent to discover the space is a waste of
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. authority can spend their
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 on better things. in my opinion, the government should spend its
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 equally. And there is no question that people are discovering they are doing a great job all over the world.
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, If the government can divide its
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 into exploring the earth and helping its citizens that will be great
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • complete waste
  • benefit the nation
  • technological advancements
  • foster
  • international cooperation
  • inspire
  • engage
  • boost the economy
  • long-term benefits
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